I guess I would like to see some of your thoughts?

i think sounds good are you planning to write more though or are you stuck at this point with it. i am not an expert or anything but love music listen to it heaps and i write my own song lyrics and would like to be a musician or involved in music industry in some way. i dont know if you have similar ambitions but if you do i think this songs is a good start so far in terms of song writing. keep at it and work on finishing this song.i am not a fan of the sware word in it but other people may be into that depending on what style of song this is. good luck with it.